Reflecting Reflexes
December 17, 2012 5 Comments
church bells chiming
familiar faces passing
damp feet and strangers
making the best of it
a new homely feel
attracted to scars
no longer
pessimistic
a kind silence
no longer humming
to thoughts
of cardboard
a remembrance
of things yet to pass
body and mind
fairly bartered
not caring
worries no longer inscribed
discomforted animal
emotionless and chaste
above cement
an overcast of
pollution and doves
mask off the face
About Sean Lynch
I really liked this, but I gotta say, last stanza wasn’t necessary. The pollution and doves was an image of perfection, and would have been a great leaving. Well done poem.
Thought about what you said, and I decided to switch the last two stanzas around, because as you said, the pollution and doves is a good image for the end. Although I think the other stanza is necessary for structure and use of slant rhyme. Thanks for the thoughtful reply.
My pleasure. Much appreciated the poem, and I think the switch will work well.
Very interesting. I like the imagery.
Well thank you, imagery is poetry.