Afterwards


She feels like a monster

She says

Back and forth

 

While you break your liver even more

Taking antihistamines to cure self-consciousness

 

About Sean William Lynch
Sean Lynch is a writer and editor who lives in South Philly. Lynch's first book of poems, the city of your mind, was published in 2013 by Whirlwind Press. His second chapbook, Broad Street Line, focusing on politics and public transportation, was published by Moonstone Press in 2016. 100 Haiku is his latest release, also published by Moonstone Press in 2018. Lynch's writing has been featured in numerous publications online and in print, including (parenthetical), Poetry Quarterly, and Tincture Journal.

11 Responses to Afterwards

  1. Sounds like a self-esteem issue mixed with addiction to alcohol and/or prescription drugs.

  2. Love the rhythm. The timing where “more” rhymes with “forth,” in part because of the former line’s terseness followed by the latter’s extension of syllables, gives me the sensation of falling. It’s like when you start to vomit and stop abruptly, covering your mouth, and then surrender to a stream of it.

    “Antihistamines” falls into the rhythm punctually like dominoes.

    • S. W. Lynch says:

      Yes I prefer off-rhythms and slant rhymes, I’m so pleased that you pointed this out. Lots of the stuff I love to write sounds better when read out loud, just as the stuff I love to read most is best read out loud. I also am glad that you saw the use of a stanza break to show different perspectives and a drastic change. And I am glad the poem feels like throwing up to you, that is wonderful, seriously. Thanks for the heartfelt, in-depth reply, as always.

  3. lgyslaine says:

    Vous êtes nominés pour le Versatile Blog Award 2012. Merci de suivre le lien. Félicitations. Gys
    You are nominated for the Versatile Blog Award 2012. Thank you follow the link. Congratulations. Gys
    http://lgyslaine.wordpress.com/2012/12/26/versatile-blog-award-2012/

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