The Loser: Part 2


My pace was slow at first, but then the anxiety grew as the cars passed by, and I thought about how I wanted to be at peace. I wished I had the chance to leave this city. To leave mother behind, and have the opportunity to smile and look back and be glad that I overcame the quicksand that was that life.
But everyday was no different than any other, except that I sank further. At least I had my secret friend. So I turned the corner and by then I was jogging. As breathing got harder I remembered the face of my long lost father. I wondered if that was what he really looked like, or if it had been so many years that what I had imagined was only imaginary. A person that never really existed.
I fished out my key as soon as I was a few doors down and slowed to a walk to catch my breath. My face was getting hot and I knew it was red. Not just from being out of shape, but a symptom from drinking during the day. I finally caught my breath on the stoop of the row-home that had been owned by Pops before he passed away.
I opened the door to find that the place had been torn apart. Breaking and entering never crossed my mind because I knew that a robber already lived here. I could hear her upstairs. I stumbled up, not out of drunkenness, but because my nerves were cracking apart. The lock to my bedroom door was broken, my mother was on all fours, throwing my things aside in search of something. I yelled at her to get out. She looked up at me in my disheveled state with hypocritical contempt. She was sneering on the inside.
You wasted little piece of shit. You stole my money to go boozing over there with that loser fag.
Even though I knew it was a waste of time, I explained to her as calmly as I could that I only spent the money I had earned at work in order to forget I had such a horrible mother. But she wasn’t my mother. She was a fiend. She needed money to get high, and lied to herself that I stole the money that she didn’t have in order to feel better about herself. She did this on a regular basis, except today was different, she went too far.
That woman pulled a kitchen knife from underneath my mattress that hadn’t been there before. That’s how I knew this was all premeditated. As I stood there frozen in my drunken stupor she grabbed him, I don’t know how she found him, and she stabbed him in the neck. She tore his insides out into the air in slow motion. I lunged at that fiend holding a knife and grabbed the blade as I tried to save him.
It was too late. In the moments that I tried to wrestle the knife out of her hand, she had ripped his head off and stabbed him until he was unrecognizable. I felt like I had played a part in it. My hand was on the weapon as I tried to stop her. I did not hide him well enough. That woman destroyed the one thing that could console me. I lost him. And so I lost all reason.
By the time I got the knife out of her hand I couldn’t think anymore. I was no longer human, just like her. And so I turned the blade on her. It would have ended there, if it wasn’t for the way she reacted. The cut was not that deep, because she taunted me without much trouble.
Come on little faggot, you fucking loser. That all you got? You’re a drunken dropout just like Arnie and your dad.
In a fit of rage I dove forward with the knife pointed outward. I pierced her heart, the organ she used only for pumping blood. I do not know how many times I stabbed her after that. And I do not know how long I sat there with the still fluffy, formerly white but now crimson-stained stuffed animal insides in my hands. I grabbed as much as I could hold, and I wept. I sobbed silently and loudly, every which way, until I was drained. I felt no remorse, only hatred, as I stared at that fiend’s twisted corpse.
I sat there staring. I picked up the knife and tried stabbing myself. It wasn’t as easy as I thought it would be, because the adrenaline was all gone. I could only make small incisions into my stomach.
The ride to the station was long. They were silent and so was I. They put me in a cell by myself, which is good. It gives me space. But it also gives me time to think. Uncle will visit, and nothing will be said. They will not kill me, but I wish they would. Even though I’m underage, they will try me as an adult. I will not plead insanity, because I’m just like any other. Except that the one thing I loved was taken away from me. And that my mother never cared for me.
All that I can think about is his crooked brown eyes and his soft sadness that was meant to give me comfort and joy. His eyes were human. He was lonely because I put him in dark places when I was gone. But he always forgave me when I came back. I can hear his voice now.
I knew you’d come back. I was stuffed in there all day, but I never lost hope. Let’s get some rest and be happy, even if it is only for a little while.
And now I’m stuffed in the darkness instead of him. With his stained cotton stuffing strewn about this cell. It won’t go away. One of his eyes rolls by across the cement floor. I reach out to grab it and nothing is there. I’m surrounded by walls of memory and longing. Then the din of fabric tearing. His body on my heart. His stubby little arms draped around my neck once again. But instead of fuzzy, brown him, it is coarse, white linen.

About Sean William Lynch
Sean William Lynch is a poet from New Jersey who was born in 1992. Lynch's first book of poems "the city of your mind" was published in 2013 by Whirlwind Press. Frank Sherlock, the poet laureate of Philadelphia, called Lynch's debut poetry book "visionary." CA Conrad claimed that the book was "marvelous!" S.W. Lynch's writing has been featured in numerous publications online and in print, including Milkfist, Poetry Quarterly, and Tincture Journal.

12 Responses to The Loser: Part 2

  1. Excellent writing man. Really good.

  2. 12kilroy says:

    I clicked the “like” button, but like is not the right sentiment. This is very well done to be sure, but it is also chilling and lonesome and desolate.

  3. myplace2spu says:

    That was edge of my seat kinda good, I couldn’t stop reading until it ended. One could really feel his pain.

  4. Peruzzi says:

    In my opinion Part I was a more affective narrative. Part II seemed to be a bloodbath that carried the thread of poetry that relates to insanity and death. Just my opinion.

    • I can certainly see how one would take the first part as a more affective narrative. I felt that there needed to be a dramatic climax juxtaposing the nothing that happened while sitting in the bar. Your opinion is valued, Peruzzi, thank you.

  5. janekinpis says:

    I think you and I have the same take on life. This was well done, I had to remind myself
    wasn’ t real. I think both part 1 and part 2 are good, perhaps it’s that this story shouldn’t end so soon? Maybe there needs to be a middle if it wants to be told. The character is so intriguing in part 1, that it just begs for more of his insight on life as he knows it. as a reader I feel its a good, enticing story and I would read more.

    • I may just find a way to keep telling his story, and perhaps give him a name, since there has been so much attracting to this character by those who responded to the story. As a writer I kind of regret killing him because it doesn’t allow a continuation of the story in his view. Even though I tried not to kill him at first, I originally wanted the story to be open ended, but I couldn’t resist. I felt like all of the emotion led to that. I’m now considering extending this short story into a series because of my readers. Thank you for the encouragement Jane.

  6. coyotero2112 says:

    Sean,
    You’re very good at presenting a personally painful past in a mostly controlled piece. Memoir writing is difficult. It’s easier to talk about than to write about, since writing is so permanent. Good work. Keep it up and I’ll keep reading. I’m putting out drafts of two works in progress – something I really don’t like to do, but there it is. It’s probably why writers are traditionally such odd characters.
    Later….

  7. pembroke5 says:

    I’m going to comment on this piece and the play–A beautiful Place. You’re loaded for Bear emotionally. The play works because that loading is off stage and increases the tension in what is onstage. Loser II works because the emotion rips through

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